Group #4

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October 16, 2004

Comments

Jose Yanez

Well, I liked the group map that your have drawn and it's very interesting because all of the places have famous names. Also, I liked the way that you talked about every place one by one. I liked the way that the town is based on religion. In the reading, the introductino is too short. It should be longer and explain with more detail. I noticed that you used references to do your blog. Also, you don't talk about how your town is going to make money. That's very important to know because your town needs to grow more. Also, you need to talk about how your people from your town are going to be punished since you have a prison on your town but overall for your tonw everything is excellent.

Stuart Oates

Your group's work was absolutely fantastic. The historical accuracy in your post tells that you worked hard on this assignment. I liked how you named places in your town after people who actually had significant role in your reform. There are some problems, however, with your post. Your group could have explained how you were going to keep the community financially secure. Your group could also have explained where the citizens would work since their community was isolated from the outside world. One other problem is that the introduction is way too short. It would be better if you could lenghten that. Other than that great job.

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